Image by Francesca Woodman via Magpie Tales
Yeah, she's pretty
stepping off that half-shell
all the boys comin' to the yard
But I'm not her, see?
Botticelli painted me, tooand everyone stifled a yawn
I'll straighten this story
You won't forget my name
or the noise no you won't
blowing those trumpets
smashing prison shells
birthed anew away from help
Venus is a nice girl
but I am the new Athena Nike
Victory is my name
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nice ref to the botticelli pic of venus....break through those barriers....i am all for it....victory...and a name brand, means you get more money...ha
ReplyDeleteStrong, vigorous, creative...
ReplyDeleteYou managed to be both interesting and clever with this pearl in a shell! :)
ReplyDeleteOlympian in tone ... I like it!!!
ReplyDeleteStrong and modern and very clever...
ReplyDeleteYou have created a very modern poem with ancient renderings, Irish Gumbo and you came out victorious! Fresh and fabulous. Thanks. =D
ReplyDeleteBreakout poetry? Heh.
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking Victory is going to be an excellent choice! Great read!
ReplyDelete" I love the smell of Napalm in the morning, smells like........Victory" - Colonel Kilgore
ReplyDeleteVenus's rebellious sister? I like the victory reference too.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully woven and extremely clever.
ReplyDelete@Linda: Thank you so much!
ReplyDelete@Kutamun: You have a choice, soldier. You either surf or fight :)
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