22 February 2015

Magpie Tales 259: This Is Not Hell


Image courtesy of Magpie Tales

"Don't walk on by,
come on in" It says,
Step right up, step inside
Trust me, I don't exist

This refulgent Carnival
is sweet, seductive Life!
Not a garish fine trick
misleading the lambs

Come, come to light!
Rest your hearts here,
friends, this is not Hell
nor are you out of it

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17 comments:

  1. RommyFebruary 22, 2015 at 3:43 PM

    The last stanza is very intriguing. The clown doesn't offer Hell, nor does it offer any respite from whatever Hell is on the outside.

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  2. UnknownFebruary 22, 2015 at 3:52 PM

    Run. Don't look back

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  3. brudbergFebruary 22, 2015 at 4:17 PM

    Maybe it's not quite hell.. but I can sometimes wonder where its border really lies...

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  4. SuyashJFebruary 22, 2015 at 10:57 PM

    i think hell is not a place we go to, it is something we carry around

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  5. MaryFebruary 23, 2015 at 6:56 AM

    love the 'refulgent Carnival' idea ... good write!

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  6. Notes From ABroadFebruary 23, 2015 at 9:40 AM

    Well, that was sufficiently creepy ! besos, C

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  7. Keith's RamblingsFebruary 23, 2015 at 12:26 PM

    I don't think I'll go in thank you! Nice one.

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2015 at 1:32 PM

    interesting take on the prompt!! Intense i must say!

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  9. 21 WitsFebruary 23, 2015 at 5:01 PM

    Ah yes, but the first mistake was trust me! Yikes! Run, run!

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  10. GailFebruary 23, 2015 at 7:07 PM

    Makes me wonder what he's offering.

    Well done with a scary factor.

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  11. WayneFebruary 24, 2015 at 12:23 AM

    Nice one Gumbo

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  12. Silent Otto February 24, 2015 at 5:19 AM

    I sense i am circling Dantes rings , but which one ?

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  13. Maria MaineroFebruary 24, 2015 at 9:21 AM

    I like those last two lines especially

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  14. HelenaFebruary 24, 2015 at 5:16 PM

    Ah'm a not a trusting this guy........ah'm a telling ya.......

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  15. Tess KincaidFebruary 25, 2015 at 11:54 AM

    I like that clever twist of words at the end, Irish...

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  16. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2015 at 4:05 PM

    Very cool ending!

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  17. Rose LFebruary 25, 2015 at 11:51 PM

    Sure I'll trust you. Just go on ahead and I will be right behind ya...yah....(turning and running)

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Don't suffer your crimes
Let the love in your heart take control..."

-'The Hair Song', by Black Mountain

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