photo by Andy Magee, via Magpie Tales
Worrying about the drive,
you play a zero-sum game
Turn your attention front and center
to gaze the rain-slick track you ride
Low radio murmur is no sin
Songs offer their own warm company
to those bursting through the front,
Wheels like pigeons wayfinding home
you play a zero-sum game
Turn your attention front and center
to gaze the rain-slick track you ride
Low radio murmur is no sin
Songs offer their own warm company
to those bursting through the front,
Wheels like pigeons wayfinding home
Ladies and gentlemen, this is a very different creation from that of my first impulse. That first impulse was a story, not blank verse, and it involved elements that, in the light of recent tragic events, were too visceral and dark. I owe a debt of thanks to Tess Kincaid, whose Magpie Tale I read before I wrote my own, but after I had that first inspiration. Because of that poem, because of 'dreich', because of rain, I made something from light. Thanks be to quantam entanglements and thank you, Ms. Kincaid.
Very accomplished work, Irish. I like the imagery of your last line, and the beautiful "invented" verb - "wayfind, wayfinding, wayfound", I guess?
ReplyDeleteYou honor me, kind sir. Thank you!
DeleteThe good doctor has set the comment bar high ~~ I can't top it! Great work.
ReplyDeleteDreich was obviously a great place to start! You then produced an in depth atmospheric piece. :)
ReplyDelete"Wheels like pigeons wayfinding home" - i liked that... beautiful!
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Incredible tug of war, battle for primacy between the Journey and the destination i feel here, thanks , Irish
ReplyDeleteThat is it, yes, yes! And you are very welcome :)
Deleteto find your way you have to concentrate
ReplyDeleteVery true, and something I have so much trouble doing. Thank you for dropping in on the Gumbo.
DeleteLove the last line. Such a beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteYour comment made me blush. Thank you!
DeleteWheels like pigeons wayfinding home...oh yes yes yes...
ReplyDeleteWhy, thank you. Always glad to provide the ride!
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