09 July 2011

Full Metal Jacket Heart

Be careful before you open a six-gun mouth
to pull the trigger with words ballistic
or spray the room with linguistic pellets
without a choke, at the speed of sound
because high-velocity physics is a tricky thing
for anyone to control, anger and scorn hard cases
that may not strike at calculated angles, instead,
a beating heart abused by blowback and ricochet


  1. I really like this. Words as bullets...that they are...or can be.

  2. Words can be very ballistic.

    ("There is life and death in the tongue."

  3. words can be so hurtful - it's good to chew on them a bit before sharing sometimes.. love the labels :)

  4. I might say, "A beating heart shredded by blowback and ricochet." It's more visual than the word 'abused.' Let's play with words...what would a soft fleshy thing look like if hit by a stray bullet or ricochet?

    I love the poem and the metaphor works well. I think especially with children, adults often forget the damaging power of careless words spoken.

  5. Yeah, when you open your mouth like that, it only comes back to bite you in the ass anyway.


"Let your laws come undone
Don't suffer your crimes
Let the love in your heart take control..."

-'The Hair Song', by Black Mountain

Tell me what is in your heart...